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*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. *Why might this be the case? *What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In
this
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 contemporary epoch, self-employment culture has become widespread. There are multiple causes for
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 phenomenon. In
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 essay, I will talk about the causes and the potential challenges that face
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 who are self-employed. To embark on, one of the major advantages of being self-employed is the flexibility of
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.
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, if any person chose to
work
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 as an independent worker, they would be able to choose the schedule and the place of their
work
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. A prime example of
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 is a survey conducted by Time News Magazine which revealed that the majority of employee preferred to leave their stable corporate jobs for the freedom of self-employment.
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, recent
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 hunters would prefer to
work
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 for
oneself
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themselves
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 for the freedom and flexibility of their
work
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.
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, there are major challenges in working as a consultant, and the most difficult challenge is the lack of stability and reliability of their jobs.
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 means that, if these
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 relied only on their consulting
job
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, they might not have enough
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 requests to cover their yearly expenses.
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, as per an article published by the BBC, a number of self-employed
individuals
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 suffer from inconsistent earnings
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 instability.
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, being a consultant is not a very reliable
job
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 for some
individuals
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. In conclusion,
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this
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 essay has manifested the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that despite the freedom of being a self-employed individual, the lack of
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 reliability makes it a major risk for some
individuals
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. I believe that being self-employed is a great choice for people who are not able to
work
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 with a
work
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 schedule that has a fixed timetable.

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Fluency and Grammar
Work on varying sentence structures and using more complex grammar to enhance fluency and sophistication in your writing.
Content Balance
Consider elaborating slightly more on the points made about disadvantages to provide a more balanced view.
Precision in Language Use
Be careful with word choice to ensure precision; for example, 'consultant' was used in a general way when you might have meant 'self-employed individuals' in the context.
Structure
Excellent introduction and conclusion with clear positions on the topic.
Use of Evidence
Very relevant examples and survey data enhance the credibility of your discussion on the advantages of self-employment.
Logical Progression
Clear logical progression of ideas from talking about the advantages to addressing the disadvantages.
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