It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

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Now the world has come to a place where the Department of Police holds major authority rather compared to the law and justice, but in the past
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the world was ruled by the Kings, Tahsildar's.
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a wide impact on how justice is done. The
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penalty
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and
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Life long
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sentence punishments fashion have become significantly popular in developing countries majorly in India.
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essay let's attempt to give analogies for both views. We all know that
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penalty
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emerged many centuries ago,
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, it differs from now for whom it is sentenced
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. Earlier, when the world was ruled by kings, the
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majorly
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for the individuals who
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rules, soldiers, or their trustworthy's
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the King,
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it was done by sword kill, bow, and arrow, etc but now it's through hanging. The belief
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the
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is a good weapon in some,
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because washing away their sins, and crimes is the best solution rather
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them.
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,
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type of punishment raises fear of
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before committing a heinous crime or attack on someone.
Life
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-Long Sentence, a
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where you can pretty much live healthily with an inch difference of luxurious
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. Some folks believe that
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punishment to make them suffer for what they did. By
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, they can live with regret and guilt which is the greatest punishment of all.
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, both views have equal respect
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pros and cons,
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from the impact of crime.
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