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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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People
 have different views about whether students should spend time on
food
 science or on other crucial
subjects
. In my point of view, learning the science of
food
 and studying other
subjects
 are both very important. On the one hand, learning the discipline of
food
 is very helpful.
Firstly
,
food
 learning is important to alleviate hunger all around the world. By doing research on grains that can grow fast, the large amount of grain production could help a lot of hungry population.
Also
, learning how to prepare the
food
 can make folk being healthier by adjusting their daily diet.
Thirdly
, cooking for families can help promote relationships with family members, and
people
 can start with learning how to prepare
food
.
On the other hand
, learning other important
subjects
such
 as physics and biology is
also
 essential. Inventions in important
subjects
 could promote the revolution of
this
 world. Every time there is a new invention in the physics field,
such
 as a steamer,
people
's lifestyles will be changed.
Moreover
,
people
 who learn important
subjects
 can contribute a lot to our social development given that there are not too many
people
 who can handle those important
subjects
such
 as genetics.
Lastly
, spending time on crucial
subjects
 can help many
people
 stay healthy since our health conditions are highly linked with those important
subjects
,
such
 as kinesiology. All in all,
people
 have arguments about devoting to foodstuff education or other important
subjects
. I believe that none of them should be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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