The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
These two diagrams
show
happiness
ratings between two groups
of single and married people
. Also
they Add a comma
Also,
show
the difference between couples
with children
and without them. This
survey was done in the US. Conforming to the first diagram, 4 age groups
of people
who are married are happier than single ones.The happiness
level among married people
varies between 40 and 45 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
People
who are in the 18 - 29, 30-49 and 65 and over years old groups
have had the biggest percentage of happiness
. At the same time, three groups
of single people
show
lower percentage rates which are between 21 and 22, but the group of people
that are 65 years old and over unmarried have big differences and their happiness
rate is about 34 percent
. In addition
, couples
who are married and have children
younger than 18 years old are happier than the other 2 groups
with 18+ children
and with no children
. Couples
with children
under 18 have 44
Correct article usage
a 44
percent
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per cent
happiness
rating, with 18+ only 41 percent
and with no Change the spelling
per cent
children
43Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. All over
, these diagrams Rephrase
Overall
show
that the happiness
rate among married couples
is higher than unmarried
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among unmarried
couples
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