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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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These two diagrams
show
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happiness
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 ratings between two
groups
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 of single and married
people
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 they
show
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 the difference between
couples
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 with
children
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 and without them.
This
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 survey was done in the US. Conforming to the first diagram, 4 age
groups
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 of
people
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 who are married are happier than single ones.The
happiness
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 level among married
people
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 varies between 40 and 45
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percent
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.
People
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 who are in the 18 - 29, 30-49 and 65 and over years old
groups
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 have had the biggest percentage of
happiness
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. At the same time, three
groups
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 of single
people
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show
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 lower percentage rates which are between 21 and 22, but the group of
people
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 that are 65 years old and over unmarried have big differences and their
happiness
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 rate is about 34
percent
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.
In addition
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,
couples
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 who are married and have
children
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 younger than 18 years old are happier than the other 2
groups
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 with 18+
children
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 and with no
children
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.
Couples
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 with
children
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 under 18 have
44
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a 44
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percent
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per cent
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happiness
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 rating, with 18+ only 41
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percent
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per cent
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 and with no
children
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 43
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per cent
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percent
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.
All over
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Overall
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, these diagrams
show
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 that the
happiness
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 rate among married
couples
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 is higher than
unmarried
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among unmarried
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couples
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.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words show, happiness, groups, people, couples, children, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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