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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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In the modern world, by raising the numbers of graduates and
importance
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 of
universities
, some individuals believe that
universities
 should supply graduates with the mastery and expertise needed in organizations.
However
, proponents think the true justification of
universities
 is giving access to information for its own sake. It
seem
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, it is advisable to provide access to
knowledge based
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 on
needed
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the needed
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 workplace, due to educating for
discover
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 a job is a basic
needs
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 in
the
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society. Based on my
view point
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, the principal duty of a university would be gathering information and teaching or training
students
consequently
, they will achieve more skills to find a job,
also
 it is a mission from the government to
universities
.
In addition
, authorities have
extended
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budget
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 for
universities
 to guided
students
 and encourage them to make abilities based on organizations needed.
Furthermore
, persons generally go to the university to make more abilities and provided that
universities
 had not answered to
this
 need,
students
 would be disappointed and
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 there. There is no means that it is a force for all to study a field just based on workplace needed and there are many majors which are useful for own.
Such
 as Psychology or philosophy. In conclusion, it is advisable for
universities
 to provide knowledge for
students
 formed on workplace needed because
that is
very
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 essential basic function.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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