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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is undeniable believe that the creation of
computers
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 has brought many
people
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 in used routine
life
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 .
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, more individuals the increased of
greatest
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 invention of the several years. I firmly agree with the statement because of the many various benefits in
life
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. To commence with,
computer
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 usage has increased by leaps and bounds in each sector which has totally changed the face of
life
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. There are many features in
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computer
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 and manage storage to high qualities. It is the home jobs of
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computer
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the computer
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 through and a lot of money to meet. Manual
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 and tedious paperwork have reduced leading to saving of paper and
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 contributing to the environment. Children are to be the played games
in
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computer
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the computer
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 .
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, loads of data can be stored in
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,thereby saving
need
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 for hard copies.
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,
computers
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 with internet facilities have become phenomenal.
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 it,
people
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 get showered upon by loads of information and multitudes
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of
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if
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 opportunities and services.
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, globalisation has become possible just due to
invention
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 of
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, as most of the services sectors have been computerised
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 as banking, railways, airline and many more .
This
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 has in turn made the work easier, faster and
convenient
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more convenient
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 for
people
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,
online
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an online
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 shopping site like eBay not only gives shoppers a choice but
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 provides
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an opportunity
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 to set up a
home based
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 business.
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,
computers
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 have facilitated transactions by credit cards, taking money from
ATM
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ATMs
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, and online bookings. In conclusion, I believe that
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not
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are not
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 only
important
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an important
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 invention but
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people
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 are used in many various merits of
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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