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Nowadays, pollution is becoming the critical issue for the mankind.It is taking many years to overcome this problem. This essay would attempt to explicate its reason as well as remedies in the forthcoming paragraphs at its length.

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To begin
 with, there are numerous reasons
of
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type
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types
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 of
pollution
 in
world
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the world
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.
First
 and foremost the crucial cause is
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
 in
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day-to-day
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day-today
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day-to-day
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 life.
Plastic
 is
non-decomposable
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a non-decomposable
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 item
that is
 why it pollutes our soil.
Moreover
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 the waste material produced by
plastic
 factories
are
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 increasing water
pollution
.
Secondly
, the
industrilization
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industrialization
are
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 rapidly growing, since
last
 decade. it is producing harmful gases which increase the pollutant in the air. To exemplify, according to
survey
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 report
twenty five
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percent
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 of air
pollution
 is due to factories and other manufacturing companies.
However
, if we will take some important steps,the
pollution
 will be controlled.
firstly
, awareness
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among the people is required. Because
,
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a large section of society
still
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is still
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 not aware
about
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 the harmful effect of
plastic
. The higher
authoritgies
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authorities
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camp
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 globally to aware
the
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people.
furthermore
,
individual
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individuals
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 can reduce the use of
plastic
 and come forward to say to
plastic
.
In addition
,
government
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the government
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 can give aid to
industry
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industries
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 to replace their machinery with
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the
an
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eco-friendly
machine
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machines
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. It will lead
decrease
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to decrease
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a the
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pollution
 level.To exemplify,a state named Himachal in India, ban
the
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plastic
 and start using eco-friendly machines in the industry, within Some weeks,
pollution
 level
get
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 down. To conclude,
athough
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although
 there are various reasons
of
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pollution
 and it is a crucial issue for humans ,
yet
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 it can be solved by taking Some important steps individually as well as globally.
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