In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging populations.

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Nowadays, the average expectancy of life is higher than ever before.
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phenomenon has brought some problems in our society.
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issue and suggestions to tackle the inevitable effects.
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with, senior citizens are an important aspect of the nation. They can give advice to the
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due to their past experiences.
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, given many old generations,
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will suffer from productivity on national labour.
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can not do a difficult job that involves
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because they are lacking
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energy and technological knowledge.
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, pension private worker,
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do not have monthly pension salary as
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civil servant does. They tend to rely on their offspring for living. Another bad effect
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can be seen in
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amount of money that
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in order to subsidize senior
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medication and treatment.
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, there are several ways that
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should do to solve
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, the
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should conduct some skill
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before the senior citizens retired
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as sewing, trading as well as baking.
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, trading skill is a beneficial thing in current years, if the elderly
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fundamental knowledge on stock,
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, obligation, and others related to investment, they will get massive advantages from
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need to supply the monthly living allowance for retired parents. More importantly, though, having a good public health facility
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lead the population to become healthier. Senior people will live longer without any serious diseases.
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, the
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does not need to allocate much money to the health care industry. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that every problem has its own solutions. I believe by making specific training to pension people,
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will reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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