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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on savings these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinions.

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It is true that some
minority
languages
 may disappear in the near future.
Although
 it can be argued that
governments
 could save
money
 by allowing
this
happen
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. I believe that these
languages
 should be protected and preserved. There are several reasons why saving
minority
languages
 could be seen as a waste of
money
.
Firstly
, if a
language
 is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programs will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing.
This
money
 might be better spent on other public services.
Secondly
, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one
language
.
Governments
 could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating with each
minority
 group. Despite the above arguments, I believe that
governments
 should try to preserve
languages
 that are less widely spoken. A
language
 is much more than simply a means of communication, it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of people who speak it. If a
language
 disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending
money
 to protect
minority
languages
,
governments
 can
also
 preserve traditions,customs and
behaviors
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 that are part of a country’s history. In conclusion, it may save
money
 in the short term if we allow
minority
languages
 to disappear, but in the long
term
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this
 would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.
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