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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on savings these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinions.

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It is true that some
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languages
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 may disappear in the near future.
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 it can be argued that
governments
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 could save
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 by allowing
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. I believe that these
languages
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 should be protected and preserved. There are several reasons why saving
minority
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languages
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 could be seen as a waste of
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.
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, if a
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 is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programs will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing.
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money
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 might be better spent on other public services.
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, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one
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Governments
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 could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating with each
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 group. Despite the above arguments, I believe that
governments
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 should try to preserve
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 that are less widely spoken. A
language
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 is much more than simply a means of communication, it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of people who speak it. If a
language
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 disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending
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 to protect
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languages
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,
governments
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 preserve traditions,customs and
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 that are part of a country’s history. In conclusion, it may save
money
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 in the short term if we allow
minority
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languages
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 to disappear, but in the long
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 would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.
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