Many people argue that zoos where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures should be banned in this century. Are you agree or desagree
Many people argue that zoos
where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures
should be banned in Add the comma(s)
, where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures,
this
century. This
essay totally agrees with this
statement because it is cruel to keep an animal in a confined space, and nature programs allow us to view animals without the need for a zoo.
The first
reason that animals should not be Kept
in an artificial and closed building is that it is inherently cruel treatment. Correct your spelling
kept
This
is because, when the animal can not live free, in their natural habitat, they suffer and are exposed to several injuries, pain and discomfort, just for the human enjoy. For example
, there is evidence that panda
living in captivity, suffer serious adaptation issues, Fix the agreement mistake
pandas
they
may suffer depression, may have problems Correct pronoun usage
apply
to reproduce
, among other problems in their quality of life.
The Change the verb form
reproducing
second
main reason is that we have access to high quality documental and movies in tv
Add an article
a tv
the tv
show
and Fix the agreement mistake
shows
you tube
, Correct your spelling
youtube
for example
, at the comfort of our home, about anything related with
Change preposition
to
Correct your spelling
wildlife
wild life
and animal in general. In these programs, people can learn about research on animal habits, their natural environment, how they feed, where they live, even how they died. Correct your spelling
wildlife
For instance
, the BBC recently produced a series called Life in the Undergrowth which allowed us to understand the lives of insects in stunning high definition.
In conclusion, it is unnecessary keep
confined Add the particle
to keep
animal
in Fix the agreement mistake
animals
closed
Correct article usage
a closed
space
, because Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
this
is totally currently in
Change preposition
at
this
time, besides
, there are many programs shows to learn about creatures and nature without the need for a zoo.Submitted by betsiecarmen on
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