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Nowadays many people read the news online instead of reading newspapers or watching TV. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

there is no denying that these days
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obtain
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 their daily reports
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 online
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,
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 because they have rapidly access for
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news
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,
also
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 the
news
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 online brings convenience and diverse entries or search.
However
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, exists important drawbacks
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 as fake
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 and
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 significant increase
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 unemployment
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the mass-media
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media
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 field. In
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 modern society, many
people
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 prefer web
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 for
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 or
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watching
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news
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, because they deliver
news
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 faster across a variety of convenient platforms, even for free and in many different languages,
therefore
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 they could have access to the events in all world instantaneously in their cellphones.
Besides
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, the public can choose the fields and topics they are interested in,
such
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 as sports, politics, economics, sociality and more.
Additionally
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, there is no limit
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 researching
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, users easily obtain
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international information by clicking a bottom on their
favorite
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 websites like BBC or CNN, which provide recent success to the public.
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, when
people
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 use
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social
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for
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read
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news
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, they could
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 to
a fake
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fake news
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news
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 and several
disinformation
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disinformations
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, because not always the online
medias
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media
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 have a confident source, and they can use false or alarming
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 to reach the attention of the public and generate more ranking, publicity or views. Another aspect to consider is the alarming increase of
people
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 who are losing their jobs in the traditional
media
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.
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, in
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 decade, have closed many local newspapers in Antofagasta, leaving hundreds of workers unemployed, especially old
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. In conclusion, there is no doubt that reading
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 online or watching shows has some advantages as well as disadvantages. On the positive side,
people
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 can know about all things
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 is happening around them and research all the information that they want.
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,
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 trend has
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 impact on
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people’s
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people
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 job who works with
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mass media
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media
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 and expose
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people
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 to dangerous fake
news
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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