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Today, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. Why is this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, it is much easier and more convenient for consumers to purchase various kinds of
food
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, including some that do not belong to local
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.
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 trend depends on the development of the
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 travel industry. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reason for the improvement and its effects. The main reason is that it is an industry where there exist lucrative profits for
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 companies. Based on the idea that an item is much more expensive in a region where it is rare than in one where it is common, those dealers cheaply purchase
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 in
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 where they are harvesting and
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 sell them in urban
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 at a higher price, making huge money. Admittedly,
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 successful transaction is closely associated with the increase of consumers’ disposable income and
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 they have the ability to widen their choices and afford some expensive exotic
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. Obviously,
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 trend generates many benefits: boosting economic growth and improving individuals’ living standards.
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,
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 leads to huge energy consumption and severe environmental pollution, since the transport vehicles,
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 as lorries and aeroplanes, need to use fuels and at the same time emit exhausted fumes.
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, due to the stiff competition among farmers in imported and exported
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, the former is suffering and is even likely to lose their way of making a living.
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 is not beneficial to economically balanced development. Personally, I am
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 concerned about
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 economic model, mainly
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 of the associated environmental problems and unbalanced boost. I think the media should encourage people to buy local
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 rather than imported one to reduce carbon footprint and governments should support local development of various
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 products to satisfy citizens’ needs. (283)
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