Many people believe that car is the best to travel n a city while others believe that bicycle is better.

Some
society
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claim
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that a machine is the best to tour a city while others believe that velocipede is suitable. Both vehicles have
a beneficial sides
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a beneficial side
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for navigation.
Firstly
, In
this
modernized ,century everybody drives
a
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automobile or use public transport but to decrease using to bike.Some
community
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prefer to trek
on
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a
car
due to it
is
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so comfortable and useful
for instance
fast service,give
an
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and
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entertaining time throughout listening to music,dancing inside the
car
. It is appropriate to our century to travel a
car
.On the other ,hand it has disadvantages for our health,
air-condition
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,maybe become accidents the whole excursion. As a ,result it causes obesity and overweight,
this
is a global problem among countries.
Secondly
, some
community
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consider that bike is
more
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better and useful rather than
car
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because there are a lot of causes for choosing
this
vehicle to tour
for
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example,beneficial for our health,without payment for fuel and
also
any kind of problems. It is beneficial that
our
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breathe to prevent obesity.On sunny days it is so preferable and useful for entertainment ,especially among young society. In conclusion,I prefer to travel by
a
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bicycle because it is convenient and suitable.I long to trek by
a
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bicycle with my friends.
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