Many people believe that car is the best to travel n a city while others believe that bicycle is better.
Some
society
Fix the agreement mistake
societies
claim
that a machine is the best to tour a city while others believe that velocipede is suitable. Both vehicles have Change the verb form
claims
a beneficial sides
for navigation.
Correct the article-noun agreement
a beneficial side
beneficial sides
Firstly
, In this
modernized ,century everybody drives a
automobile or use public transport but to decrease using to bike.Some Change the article
an
community
prefer to trek Fix the agreement mistake
communities
on
a Change preposition
in
car
due to it is
so comfortable and useful Wrong verb form
being
for instance
fast service,give an
entertaining time throughout listening to music,dancing inside the Correct your spelling
and
car
. It is appropriate to our century to travel a car
.On the other ,hand it has disadvantages for our health, air-condition
,maybe become accidents the whole excursion. As a ,result it causes obesity and overweight,Wrong verb form
air-conditioning
this
is a global problem among countries.
Secondly
, some community
consider that bike is Fix the agreement mistake
communities
more
better and useful rather than Change the word
apply
car
because there are a lot of causes for choosing Add an article
a car
this
vehicle to tour for
example,beneficial for our health,without payment for fuel and Add the comma(s)
,for
also
any kind of problems. It is beneficial that our
breathe to prevent obesity.On sunny days it is so preferable and useful for entertainment ,especially among young society.
In conclusion,I prefer to travel by Correct pronoun usage
we
a
bicycle because it is convenient and suitable.I long to trek by Remove the article
apply
a
bicycle with my friends.Correct article usage
apply
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