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Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying

It is
commom
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common
 wisdom that people will give up purchasing
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 books and magazines in the long term. Presumably, it will happen because of the Internet of things, to be precise, individuals will be using different sources of information
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 the web including literature and articles. What is more, individuals will not need to spend money
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 reading. I totally agree with
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 of all, individuals who still prefer using
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 sources of information are being increased every year. To illustrate, a Russian survey
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conducted
 in 2021 showed that
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 of Russian readers who follow the news using newspapers is only 2% whereas 20% of
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 get updated on social media. In fact, the older generation that used to read magazines and
paper
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 books daily is
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diminishing
 every year meanwhile young people are used to e-books and modern technology.
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, it is getting
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increasingly
 common among
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 generation to choose in favour of digital sources which are often free even today.
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, it is not a secret that for
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 of
paper
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 literature and magazines are tonnes of trees are needed.
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, in order to grow just one oak approximately 100 years is necessary.
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, humanity has
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encountered
 a serious issue so-called deforestation which demands an urgent solution.
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 why citizens of our planet are highly likely to quit consumption of
paper
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 resources of information in the foreseeable future not to mention that they will save money using the net. To conclude, it is getting increasingly common to choose free e-books and social media on the Internet
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 of newspapers and regular books among the young generation.
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, global problems
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 of trees
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 a result, influence peoples' decisions to incline to use the web.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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