Should governments or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools?

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society, it is essential for a child to be educated in order for him or her to have success later on in life.
Children
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are typically educated in schools, which are run by the
government
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. The
government
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officials
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decide what is taught to the
children
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and what is not. Personally, I believe that it is better if governments are responsible for the subject matter covered in
school
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and not the teachers. It is a common goal to supply all
children
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with the same opportunities in life, meaning that the same
core
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knowledge
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should be taught to all
children
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to offer them the same benefits. Naturally, some
children
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will be better at certain subjects than others and will
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obtain a more detailed degree of
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, yet every child should be taught the same
core
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knowledge
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. Education provides opportunities
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because certain types of education will enable
children
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to pursue certain careers later on in life. Supplying the same
core
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knowledge
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is an essential concept, yet it has not been put into action in several countries. In Germany,
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, the syllabus taught depends on the region of the country. In certain regions,
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attend
school
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for thirteen
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and in other regions for twelve
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.
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raises the question
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or not the
children
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obtain the same degree of
knowledge
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and that the
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attending
school
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for thirteen
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are at an advantage compared to those attending
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for twelve
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. Already one can see that problems arise when the regional
government
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decides upon the
core
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knowledge
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taught to students. If teachers had a say in what
knowledge
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should be taught to students, the subject matter would become even more complex. The
core
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knowledge
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would not only vary from region to region, yet
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from
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to
school
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, providing unfair advantages and disadvantages for certain students. In conclusion, the
government
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of a country should decide upon what
knowledge
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is taught in schools, as the situation would become too complex if all teachers were responsible for
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aspect.

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