Some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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either
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whether
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individuals should continue studying after graduating from high
school
or
the
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whether the
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best bath to ensure a
high salary
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career
is by applying for a
job
right after graduation. I personally believe that people should hold a degree to
work
in a good
career
. On one hand, studying
in
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the
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university gives
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students
a degree to help them ensure a position in their
career
and as much they improve their level they will be updated to the next position
besides
, some high paid jobs
required
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require
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a degree to apply for
such
as engineering and nursing.
In addition
, almost every major in university
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vocational subjects in the syllabus,
therefore
,
students
will be enriched with the
experience
they need to become professional in their
work
.
For example
, nursing
students
have training hours that they should do to graduate and
work
. So studying in college surely will guarantee an excellent
career
.
On the other hand
, choosing
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easy access to
the
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job
by applying for it after finishing high
school
can
also
ensure a
job
but, not as good as the college
students
will have
due to
the differences between their knowledge since the high
school
students
will gain
experience
without expending their knowledge.
This
will make their
work
improvement slow and they will spend their lives in the same position.
In other words
, gaining only
experience
will affect the
work
development negatively.
To sum up
, to ensure a good
job
people should have a balance between
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knowledge and
the
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experience
and not
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star
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start
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working after high
school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • specialized fields
  • job prospects
  • earning potential
  • formal education
  • networking opportunities
  • career advancement
  • practical skills
  • work environment
  • financial independence
  • high costs
  • skills and experience
  • formal education
  • prioritize
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