Some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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either

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whether

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individuals should continue studying after graduating from high

school

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best bath to ensure a

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career

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is by applying for a

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right after graduation. I personally believe that people should hold a degree to

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in a good

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university gives

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students

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a degree to help them ensure a position in their

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and as much they improve their level they will be updated to the next position

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, some high paid jobs

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a degree to apply for

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as engineering and nursing.

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, almost every major in university

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vocational subjects in the syllabus,

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students

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will be enriched with the

experience

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they need to become professional in their

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, nursing

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have training hours that they should do to graduate and

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. So studying in college surely will guarantee an excellent

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easy access to

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by applying for it after finishing high

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ensure a

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but, not as good as the college

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will have

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the differences between their knowledge since the high

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students

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will gain

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without expending their knowledge.

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improvement slow and they will spend their lives in the same position.

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development negatively.

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people should have a balance between

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knowledge and

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experience

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working after high

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task response

Ensure that every paragraph contributes to the development of your argument and makes a clear point.

coherence and cohesion

Your introduction and conclusion should be stronger and more fully developed. Ensure that your ideas flow cohesively throughout the essay.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

264 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

higher education
specialized fields
job prospects
earning potential
formal education
networking opportunities
career advancement
practical skills
work environment
financial independence
high costs
skills and experience
formal education
prioritize

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Some school children buy healthy food from the school cafeteria. However, some buy unhealthy food. What are the reasons for both these situations? Should schools be allowed to sell unhealthy food?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. [598]

Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.