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Many people think that global environmental problems should be deal with internationaly rather than domestically.

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Most of the population think that world environmental issues should be solved
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the
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worldwide
instead
 of local. I strongly agree that
earth’s
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 ecosystem should be protected globally.
Firstly
, the world nature troubles have to resolve
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intercontinentally
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intercontinental
. There are a lot of natural difficulties in the eart
such
 as climate change,
pollution
, environmental
degredation
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degradation
 and resource depletion.
This problems
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 are related
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 the entire world’s
countries
 and need a joint effort to tackle
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.
Moreover
, developed
countries
 are more responsible
global
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 warming than other
countries
. Because, they use fossil fuels, electricity
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lot relatively. The reduction of greenhouse gas emissions needs to be agreed
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 international meetings. Solving environmental problems is a financial burden for many
countries
 can not afford on their own.
On the other hand
, some issues can be solved
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locally. Some
pollution
,
such
 as river water
pollution
, is a localize difficulty. İn addition, politics know the best how to deal
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 own local
pollution
 situations. Only domestic governments can improve waste disposal and sanitation.
Also
,
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 of each country are responsible for the education of
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 about the environmental troubles. Better public transport policies are aiming to help reduce gas emissions must be implemented locally. İn conclusion,
although
 we should take
worlwide
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worldwide
 environmental issues locally into consideration , overall the idea
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the
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 problem globally is more important
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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