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Some people think that money is the best gift teenagers.others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #money #gift #teenagers
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 graphs illustrate how the three electrical equipment of
ownership
 changed in a particular country and how many
hours
 one
household
 spent on doing house chores on a weekly basis from 1920 to 2019. Generally, the
ownership
 for washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 experienced
a
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significant growth with fridge and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 becoming the most ubiquitous items whereas a downward trend can be observed
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 the amount of time that a single
household
 spent during that period. In 1920, when a
household
 consumed 50
hours
 a week, the proportion of washing
machine’s
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machine
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ownership
 was significantly the highest among other appliances at 40%.
However
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 in 2019, washing
machine
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machines
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 became the least popular type
although
it
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they
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 reached over 70%. In the meantime, the number of
hours
 a single
household
 consumed declined dramatically to 10
hours
 a week in 2019.
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 there was a noticeable increase in the
ownership
 of
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2019.
Similarly
, the proportion of
fridge’s
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ownership
 was a mere 30% in 1920, followed by a considerable increase to 90% in 1980,
then
 it reached a peak of 100% in 2019. To sum up, almost every
household
 possessed a fridge and
vacuum
 cleaner, spending less time on them in 2019.
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