there have been many advances in technology over the past fifty years. some people prefer the traditional communications of the past while some favor the modern type of technological communication. compare and contrast methods of communication used today with those which were used in the past.

TECHNOLOGICAL ADVANCES HAVE BEEN INTRODUCED OVER THE PAST FIFTY YEARS. NEEDLESS TO SAY, THESE DEVELOPMENTS AFFECT COMMUNICATION TOOLS AT THE SAME
TIME
. SOME OF
PEOPLE
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CONTINUE TO USE TRADITIONAL ONES, WHILE THE OTHERS PREFERS TO FOLLOW UP THE MODERN TECHNOLOGICAL DEVICES.
THIS
ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN HOW THEY HAVE AN IMPACT ON OUR LIVES AND WHY COULD BE PREFERRED. NEEDLESS TO SAY, NOWADAYS ACCESS TO KNOWLEDGE AND SOMEONE IS EASY MORE THAN
ANYTIME
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, THANKS TO TECHNOLOGY. VIA MODERN TOOLS,
PEOPLE
CAN STAY IN TOUCH WITH THEIR FRIENDS REGARDLESS OF WHAT THE
TIME
IS AND
FURTHERMORE
REACH ALL THE KNOWLEDGE AND NEWS WHAT THEY WONDER. I WANT TO LEARN HOW CAN I MAKE
VISKY
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RISKY
VICKY
,
FOR INSTANCE
, I CAN GET A LECTURE FROM THE MASTER OF
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VICKY
AFTER A LITTLE RESEARCH ONLINE.
THOSE KIND
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THAT KIND
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OF BENEFITS OF MODERN DEVICES MAKE LIVES EASIER AND
THEREFORE
THEY ARE ESSENTIAL FOR SOME OF US’ LIVES.
ON THE OTHER HAND
,
THAT
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PROPERTIES OF TECHNOLOGIC VEHICLES BRINGS SOME DRAWBACKS NEAR THEM AND SOME
PEOPLE
PREFER TRADITIONAL ONES DUE TO THESE HANDICAPS. BEING PERPETUALLY AVAILABLE BLOCKS
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THE FEELING
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OF
FULLY
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BEING FULLY
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PRESENT IN THE MOMENT.
FOR EXAMPLE
, WHEN I RETURN TO HOME AFTER A LONG AND TIRED DAY, I WANT TO SPEND
TIME
WITH MY FAMILY BUT
INSTEAD
OF
THIS
TYPE OF
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TIME
, I HAVE TO REPLY
AN
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URGENT E-MAIL FROM WORK. BECAUSE OF
THAT KIND
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THOSE KINDS
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OF OBSTACLES, SOME
PEOPLE
KEEP
TO USE
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TRADITIONAL
DEVICE
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DEVICES
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.
IN
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SUM UP, MODERN TECHNOLOGICAL COMMUNICATIONS HAVE BOTH DARK AND BRIGHT
SIDE
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SIDES
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, LIKE EVERYTHING ELSE IN THE WORLD AND USAGE OF THEM IS UPON TO USER’S NEEDS.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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