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A"cashless society" is one where people use Debit/Credit cards and other forms of payment instead of cash. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages.

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cashless
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 society is
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one in which
people
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 use more Credit and Debit
Cards
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instead
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 of carrying Cash in their wallets. I believe that a community
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 is
cashless
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 has lots of benefits to offer. I will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of the
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 society in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with the demerits,
first
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 of all, if the society goes
cashless
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 altogether, it can become more spend-thrift. If
people
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 carry
cards
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 all the time and every shop and vendor has a swiping machine available,
people
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 can become impulse buyers and end up purchasing things
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 they do not even require.
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, as the
cards
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 are tiny, they can easily drop from
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 pockets, and
people
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 can lose a lot of
money
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 if they do not notice it promptly.
On the contrary
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, there are plenty of benefits of going
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. The most significant advantage is that
people
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 need not carry bulky wallets all the time. These days, there are Smartphone cases available, which have a
card
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 pocket made in them.
People
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 can keep all their
cards
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 in them and save their pocket space.
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, carrying
cards
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 is safer because even if
people
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 lose them, they can promptly intimate their Bank to cancel their
card
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 on the spot. But, if they have cash in their wallet, and they lose it, they can never get the
money
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 back.
Moreover
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, paying by
card
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 saves
money
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 in
long
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 run.
For example
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, if we purchase an item for $24.48 and we pay in cash, it gets rounded off, and we are supposed to pay $24.50. But if we tap the
card
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instead
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, we spend the exact amount. It might not appear to be a significant saving, but when we always use the
card
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 to pay for everything, we can save a lot of
money
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. In conclusion, becoming
cashless
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 brings in just a few disadvantages, but if
people
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 stay more conscious, they can avail
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plethora of its advantages. Every country should go
cashless
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 and lead a secure life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cashless society
  • digital payments
  • financial inclusion
  • technological infrastructure
  • transactions
  • privacy concerns
  • financial management
  • system failures
  • cyber-attacks
  • convenience
  • electronic payments
  • budgeting
  • financial information
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