The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

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information about the number of tourists from Japan who travelled abroad and tourist market shares of Australia

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the age of 10 years.

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, it can be seen from the bar chart, that number of travellers

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increased throughout the date. Moving to the line graph, we can see

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rose with a slight decrease in the middle of the period

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the bar chart, there was a sharp increase between 1985 and 1890, beginning from 4

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up to 11

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.

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, it showed a small decrease

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some

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in the following year. The whole rest of

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it rose noticeably up to 15

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and it was the highest point over the years It is noticeable from the line graph, that shares of Japan's tourist market grew gradually from 2

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to 5

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between 1985 to 1989. The

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year it saw a small drop to 4

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the all remaining stage it continued to rise by just several thousand and reached the highest point of just under 6

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in 1994. ,

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at the end

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of the

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trend fell slightly and remain with 6

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market shares