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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Some would argue that it is correct for governments to finance artists, while others believe that
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 should be used for public benefits.
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 I agree that it is important to invest in public
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, I do not think spending on the
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 is a waste of monetary resources. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the government budget on public
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 as hospitals, roads, and schools in
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 country are chronically underfunded, and
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 has led to bad
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quality
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.
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, if the government does not spend enough
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 on hospitals, the health of our society may decline.
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, if not enough
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 is spent on schools, our children may not be properly educated.
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, it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough on these things because they are the ones more dependent on
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 situation in which many people cannot receive the treatment they need when they need it.
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 investing so much
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 in public
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 is essential for
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quality
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, we cannot put aside
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 as a factor for a better
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.
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, young painters and sculptors need grants and loans from the state because they are not established enough to support themselves.
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 to say that at the beginning of their careers, no one knows who they are, and
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, they are unable to sell any of their works and
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 why they need monetary support.
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, the
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 have an important impact on our
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 of
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 because many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that the government assists
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 institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. These are the reasons why I believe in the importance of funding
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. To conclude, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public
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 as
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 influences the
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 of
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 for nearly all of us. Having said that, I do not believe spending
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 on the
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 is a waste of
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 as
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 too provides important benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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