Some people say that is important to keep your home your and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

128 words

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productivity
mental clarity
efficiency
professionalism
first impressions
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compulsive neatness
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minimising distractions
systematic arrangement
time management
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Some people say that is important to keep your home your and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Advertisements play a major role on TV in market economics. Despite the benefits of such information, many people criticize the role of TV advertising. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on television and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

As water is valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?