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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones (cellphones) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

#countries #phones #cellphones #apps #development
The line graph illustrates the amount number of questions received by the office of tourist information in one city between January 2011 and
June
 2011. As an overview, the most significant noticeable is the upward trend in enquiries by face to face and by phone was the dramatic increase in the middle of the year, while other enquiries by post or email presented a decline. According to the details, enquiries in person was only 400
cases
,
then
 enormously rose to 600 in February and 800 in March.
Consequently
, the growth went up to 1,200 in April before reaching its peak of almost 2,000
cases
 in
June
. In terms of questioning via call centre, the
cases
 were accounted for around 900 at the beginning of the year and slightly dropped to 800 in February,
then
 rose to 1,000 before remaining stable until April.
Finally
, hit the most amount in
June
 at 1,600
cases
.
in contrast
, the
cases
 by mail were gradually fell from approximately 790 in January to under 400 in May and maintained at the same level in
June
.
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