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It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Young
people
 are experts at using social
media
, even in school. What are some of the positive effects of using social
media
 in the classroom? As a study shows, 57.6% of the world's population uses social
media
 and the average daily usage is 2 hours and 27 minutes. From the all the year groups, teenagers are the greatest contributors to
this
 huge population. We can see teenagers using their devices everywhere, no matter at home or in schools.
Although
 using social
media
 is still
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 upon in schools,
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some teachers have already started to reconsider the idea.
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 social
media
 in classes has many positive effects on the
students
. One of the many positive effects of social
media
 is the extended knowledge of
students
. As
students
 can use different apps to search for information and they can find different mentors and training programs online. With them,
students
 can learn new skills and take steps toward their future career goals.
For example
, on YouTube,
students
 can find free tutorials to improve in certain subjects. On Pinterest, they can find new inspiration for their projects and on Instagram, they can post their progress and their results. Another thing is that social
media
also
 helps
students
 to become more supportive toward others. Since many
people
 share their personal experience online or their struggles and
students
 can show their support by encouraging them through messages and comments. By supporting others,
students
 can become more supportive and teachers can use social
media
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 to support certain programs.
For example
, donation programs for organizations
such
 as WWF or the Red Cross.
Last
 but not least, social
media
 helps
students
 to find
people
 with different ideas. The good thing about social
media
 is that it helps
people
 to find others with different opinions and in
this
 way,
students
 can learn about new ways of thinking. They can
also
 learn about how
people
 outside the school might have thought and
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 so they can be more prepared when they left the school themselves. To conclude, using social
media
 in classes can help
students
 in many different ways. It serves as a complementary part to teaching, a perfect example for the
students
 to become more supportive, and a way to connect
students
 with the rest of the world. Maybe someday in the future,
students
 are allowed to use social
media
 in classes and their way of thinking could be improved correspondently.
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