There is an increasing population on the planet, and people are running out of water, food, and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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people believe that increasing population causes unemployment.
For instance
, the rise in the number of educated people creates a tough competition to get a job for everyone which results in being unemployed.
Overpopulation
leads to an increase in demand for food supply. Since being unemployed it leads to scarcity of food
in other words
it results in malnutrition. Increased in the quality of medical health services
which
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are available to everyone lead to reduced mortality that drops drastically
therefore
it
also
resulted in
overpopulation
. On another
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people
also
believe it is the need of the hour to take steps to control the
ever increasing
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overpopulation
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in developing countries like India which is well-known for its
overpopulation
. Providing
education
about family planning can be an important step for fighting
overpopulation
. Online and offline
education
are the two different ways of providing
education
.
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free seminars, events can be the means for providing offline
education
and online
education
can include social media as a means of spreading
education
among a huge mass. In my opinion, it is a crucial time for a developing country to focus on one of the important issues of
overpopulation
and online and offline
education
can be a great source of help for fighting against
overpopulation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • depletion
  • arable land
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • unemployment
  • healthcare systems
  • overcrowding
  • cost of living
  • family planning
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • agricultural yields
  • conservation
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