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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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Indeed that today is the best
time
 to be alive and experience the convenience of
technology
 that we have today.
This
 may include advancements of
technology
such
 as being able to immediately call your loved ones with a click of a button, the convenience of acquiring transportation with your mobile phone, and
lastly
 how certain individuals are enhancing the quality of life of society in terms of
technology
.
However
, there was a
time
 in history when none of
this
 existed yet, A
time
 was innovators were still hungry for motivation and are trying to find different ideas that society have yet to experience. In
this
 essay, I will be comparing how
technology
 was in the late 2000s as compared to the year 2022. In the late 2000s, Since mobile phones have not yet been introduced at the
time
 and life was simple. Certain individuals enjoy socializing with other people inside coffee shops, pubs, and public areas. They usually communicate and schedule their meetups through payphones, landlines or going to their houses. Those were some ways how they were able to socialize or even plan gatherings.
Additionally
, kids in the year 2000, oftentimes enjoy playing outside with other children, As compared to today, Now children seldom go outside and play and you usually see them with mobile phones r
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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