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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, there are many kinds of
activities
 that can help
people
 improve
language
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skills
. It is apparent that most
of
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the
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people
 think reading books can develop more
imagination
 and
language
skills
 than the one who prefer to watch
TV
. From my point of view, I think both of these
activities
 are provided
people
 improve their
imagination
 and
language
skills
. Reading more books can help
people
 to improve their
imagination
 because they have to transform the words and imagine those words to be the picture in their mind.
This
 is the fun part when you read the
book
. You can imagine as much as you can.
Moreover
, when you read the
book
. You can learn new vocabulary and new sentence structure at the same time.
On the other hand
, there
is
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 some reasons that
people
 think watching
TV
 is not improve their
language
skills
 too much. They think watching
TV
 is
waste
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a waste
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time
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, and some program is not suitable for their children. When you watch
TV
 you do have not to think and imagine at all because you will see every scene on the
TV
. According to my viewpoint, both of these
activities
 can provide knowledgable to
people
 who read and watch them. When you read the
book
 you can imagine the picture following the words that you read and when you watch
TV
 you can imagine what will be appeared in the
next
 scene.
In addition
, knowing new vocabulary and sentence structure are the method that
people
 will obtain when they participate in these
activities
. We can improve
language
skills
 from the eyes when we read the books, and we
also
 learn vocabulary from the ears when we watch
TV
. To conclude, both of these
activities
 can improve
imagination
 and
language
skills
 for
people
 who
is
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 interested. In terms of children, Adults should restrict and scan what kind of program and what type of
book
 that children can access because these
activities
 are the possible choices for developing
language
skills
 and
imagination
.
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