Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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believe that information about
crimes
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which is delivered by media is not important to announce for society. I totally disagree
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this
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statement.
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,
this
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information will be an effort to prevent
this
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accident
happening
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from happening
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again in the future and lead to negative
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effects
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for perpetrators. These will be discussed by me in the forthcoming paragraphs. Many
people
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avoid
crimes
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coming to them because it brings some negative impacts to victims.
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, detail is really crucial as a basic knowledge to them since it contains
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detail
such
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as physical
characteristic
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characteristics
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of doers and crime
situation
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situations
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.
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, viewers who watch the news about
crimes
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can arrange
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a few
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strategies
to
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against it.
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,
woman
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a woman
the woman
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who
wear
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wears
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sling
bag
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bags
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will put their bag in front of
her
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them
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where they can oversee it. Talking to another reason,
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the description
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description
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descriptions
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related
with
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to
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crimes
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will be displayed in the programmes.
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, watchers are able to know about it. They will know who
people
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are, where
people
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live and other details about it. It is believed that it can bring negative
effect
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effects
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to perpetrators owing to the fact that society can build social punishment
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them. According to research which is conducted by
Indonesian
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an Indonesian
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NGO, 80% community treats doers bad as they feel shame due to the accidents. For me, the explanation can educate society to aware
about
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of
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crimes
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.
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why it is really essential to report.
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, it is able to support investigation which is done by police to find the truth. To conclude,
people
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think that programmes should not reveal
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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information
of
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about
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crime
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the crime
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. In my opinion, I
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am convince
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convince
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convinced
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to differ from it.
Community
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The community
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has to know about it so that they can set up some ways to avoid it and it
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support
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to chary effect for
people
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.

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