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At the present time ,the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people

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Young
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 generation is the strongest strength of the bright future. Nowadays, In many countries includes
big
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 ratio of young
people
 compared
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 ratio of senior citizens.there are equal benefits and
drawback
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of
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this
 situation. Merits and demerits are illustrated in the
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To begin
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large
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 number of young
adults
 is beneficial to
countries
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the countries
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 economy.
furthermore
,
adults
 can improve their skills and ability very speedily. Young
people
 can
utilizing
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 youth power easily and without any mistakes.
Moreover
. Young
people
 are believed as
fastest
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learner
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. Result of
this
,
the
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 can learn
latest
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 technology very fast so that , countries will more modernize.
However
 , senior citizens
is
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the
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 important part of society. Their experience has motivated and
inspire
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to
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other
generation
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.because of their
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overlooked
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over looked
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 experience and knowledge, they guide
to
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young
people
 right way .It is
long
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 term
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 for
adults
.
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 of
this
, Infosys company accepted old age
people
 in an interview, they have 30% of older
people
 in every team .
this
is
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 the main reason
of
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 their success. In conclusion, In some
nation
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,
young
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the young
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adults
 population is more than senior citizens in
recent
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period
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 of time .
Merits
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 and demerits of
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 statement are similar.
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