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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 has always been an important part of
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 or we can say that
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 is a rule of
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, without
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nature
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 cannot survive. So, I am a firm believer that
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 is always a great thing. But on the other ,hand we all know that everything has its own pros and cons.
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, when thinking it from an individual's perspective who avoids
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, a person for whom the concept of
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 is bad, that person believes that uniformity is the key to one's
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 and changing those small or large things is going to disrupt his/her
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 in unimaginable ways.
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, I had a friend who used to curse if there was any kind of
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 in his
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 because for him it was bad he needed uniformity in his
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.
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, when we talk about the other side of the coin we can see in
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 how
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 has been a constant part of it, even the basic processes of
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 include different stages of
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.
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, water which is scientifically known as hydrogen peroxide has 3 different stages or we can say that water
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 its forms in 3 different stages which include vapour, liquid and ice.
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 when we talk about an individual's personality those too
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 with time as people behave differently under different circumstances. So in conclusion, we can say that
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 have always been a part of the
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 of any individual, some prefer to live their lives doing exactly the same thing while others tend to
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 things as they move forward with their
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. And I believe that
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 is always a good thing as it helps to adjust with the ever-changing entity which is time as time
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 and it
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 doesn't stop for anyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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