Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

a number of individuals believe

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former criminals is the best person to acknowledge youngsters about the disadvantages of criminals. In

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essay, I strongly believe

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is necessary action to establish acceptable

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communities.

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and foremost, former

lawbreaker

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generally had many experiences about

criminality

because those people already saw and committed these actions by themselves in the past.

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their obligation in prison, they have many insights about justice and have immense knowledge about

criminality

.

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former

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villain

might educate

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about the root

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cause

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of crime and will inform

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the demerits of being

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a result, many teenagers think

this

is beneficial for them to avoid these notorious actions in the

future

.

On the other hand

,

former

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villain

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could assist the government to develop an adequate and sufficient regulation to prevent

criminality

in the society because they have sufficient background and knowledge

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phenomenon.

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, the development of surveillance

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in every store in the city based on former

villain

input will reduce the criminal event in the

future

.

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of data protection regulation in communities will ensure the privacy right of a large number of individuals in society.

As a result

,

criminality

levels in communities will sink and disappear in the

future

hopefully. In conclusion, former criminals would not harm people as long as society can encourage them;

hence

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duty

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them to enhance the law to humanity.

Furthermore

, they could deliver

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knowledge to be shared with

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the youngster

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youngster

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to prevent

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notorious actions in the

future

.