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Today youth like to live with friends or alone and they are leaving their parents . Some people think this a great idea. Do you agree or disagree with this .

#youth #friends #parents #people #idea
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this
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modren
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modern
 era,
Youth
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prefer
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prefers
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 to accommodate on their
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own
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on
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own
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 or like to live with their friends.Some people opine
its
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it's
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 a right move to make . I partially agree with
this
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 given notion .
This
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 essay will
intends
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 to look at my points and examples. On the one hand , who says
its
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it's
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 good to live with friends or alone claim that
youth
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 can get independent when they start
this
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 phenomenon.Folk would no longer rely on their
parents
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 for everything.International students,
for instance
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 ,
they
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apply
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 move to
another countries
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another country
other countries
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 just to stand on their own
feets
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 miles away from their
family
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families
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. What is more, folk come to know about expenses of
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today's
todays
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today's
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 life and they start earning at
young
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a young
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 age . Juvenile take their own bills and help to nation's economy.
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 ,I am with the crowd who points
that
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out that
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 living with the family has its own importance.
Parents
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 expect special
need
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needs
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at
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in
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 their 50s and I personally believe that
its
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it's
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 the responsibility of
youth
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 to take care of their old age
parents
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. Let's take it example , In India. At
jharkhand
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Jharkhand
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 state in
mishra
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Mishra
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 family their both
kids
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 left home early and
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parents
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their parents
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 died in depression and
kids
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 didn't have any
clew
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clue
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 about that when they came after three years to home.
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, At
this
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 age ,
Youth
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also
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 need someone to keep an eye on them.
Kids
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 can get into
wrong
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the wrong
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 groups and start taking drugs.Juvenile easily comes
in
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under
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 pressure
of
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from
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 peers .
Therefore
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, there
sould
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should
could
would
 have someone to look for them . Researchers have been revealed that 49% of
youth
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 get into wrong activities and
drug
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drugs
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 just because of loneliness.Family time should be mandatory.
Also
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,
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the family
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family
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families
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also
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 provide more opportunities
to
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for
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 their
kids
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 to follow dreams. To sum up ,New
trand
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trend
 has been set by
youth
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 living alone and leaving their family .I personally believe that with family
juvenile
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juveniles
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 can take
right
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the right
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 side of their future . There
has
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have
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 benefits of living alone Independence , Knowing the reality of life and taking their
expences
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expenses
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.
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