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It is sometimes said that a high salary is the most important factor in choosing a job. Do you agree?

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It is argued that a satisfying income would be regarded as the most vital part when facing a career, especially for young
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. As far as I am concerned, I partly agree with
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 opinion. A good salary is definitely necessary for
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 who are desperate for a good life.
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 is because it would support basic living needs.
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, food, rent and all the bills are all needed to pay in
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 society , and high living expenses push
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 to choose a good position which can provide a better salary,
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 so many young
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 would priority good money when choosing
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. Meanwhile, except for the surviving, many
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 have to afford a family which a high salary is dispensable for supporting the children's education or parents' caring fee.
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, there are other significant factors that
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 will consider when deciding on a job.
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, working environment and good colleague relationships
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 play a positive role in
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, which will improve job satisfaction and
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 quality. Apart from that, a sense of
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 achievement and learning something from
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 are valued by some
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. Since professionals will achieve a huge fulfilment from
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.
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, some
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 are willing to
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 in charity for free , because they just enjoy the feeling of helping
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 and society. In conclusion, a decent income is a factor in choosing a career, but it is not always the most vital consideration. Since
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 will choose a job from their own preferences and situations.

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