Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is becoming increasingly popular and become a trend that
people
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choose to live alone with their friends or on their own
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of staying with their family members. Some believe that
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lifestyle has a bad habit on the society and I completely agree with
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statement.
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the one hand, when
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live without their family they can get into
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thing
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.
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,
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can choose friends which influence
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them badly. They study smoke, drink, use drugs and so on. They will not have anyone to talk with or share feelings with, but their parents will always be there for them if they live with family.
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, if they fall sick or anything happened to them, their family will always be ready to take care of them without any expectations.
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the other hand, the
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distance between their home and the place where they study or work.
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situation
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people
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have no choice except to leave alone. because they want to have their private space for themselves. Because sometimes when they do their job or study they need more concentration and do not want any disruptions
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so that they prefer to live outside their family home. When we live independently, we tend to think for ourselves and do things
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benefit us. But, it is not the case in a family setup. We live, dance, eat, cry, take care, forgive, forget and celebrate together in a family. Any community will undoubtedly prosper with
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erosion
  • Communal cohesion
  • Geographical dispersion
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Real estate dynamics
  • Psychological well-being
  • Technological facilitation
  • Independence
  • Traditional vs modern lifestyles
  • Intergenerational relationships
  • Virtual communities
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