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In spite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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It is certainly true that many developments have been made in agriculture. Every day massive humans around the globe continue to suffer from starvation. The aim of
this
 essay is to examine possible reasons behind
this
 issue and
also
 suggest some ways to solve the situation.
To begin
 with, it seems that lack of funds to buy an agricultural machine and hard to implement advanced agricultural methods are an acute problem in most underdeveloped
countries
.
This
 will reduce
food
 income. Due to foodstuff waste, excess
food
 will not be distributed to lack of grain of region.
However
,
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 prices of machines and chemicals needed for high produce farming, farmers in developing
countries
 are unable to afford them. Drought and pests can
also
 cause a lot of agricultural damage as well as dramatically shortage of income for
food
.
Therefore
, those modern farming methods stay unavailable to the people who need
it
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 the most. What’s more, it has shown that strong economies of the Americas and western
countries
 destroy fresh
food
 each year in order to keep stable market prices. The solution that might be the most effective is to directly ask developed nations to send technicians and scientists to improve our planting environment.
This
 is a direct way to gain
food
 production to address inadequate foodstuff.
On the other hand
, we can reduce
food
 waste by selling excess
food
 cheaply to underdeveloped
countries
 to make their hungry people better. To sum up,
although
 agriculture has made great progress, there are still many people in the world who are hungry. I offer two ways to solve the issue by sending experts to
countries
 that need it the other is to decrease grain waste.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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