Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

Artists these days are much more recognized for their glitz and fame than
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for their actual accomplishments, which sets a negative example to the younger generation. I disagree with that as not everyone is known for their glam and fortune but is famous for their
hardwork
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hard work
.
Firstly
, I would discuss
about
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how
celebrities
play a vital role in the younger generation as many take them to be their inspiration and
secondly
, not only
celebrities
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make money, they
also
do charities and help in need.
Celebrities
play
vital
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role in modern society. More recently, there have been many superstars who have become famous for their talents in singing,
sports
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and sports
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.
Celebrities
can be
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persons from the entertainment industry, sports and even politicians. Significant
celebrities
can spread any ideas and
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trends around the world; Not all the trends that go in having huge views
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any social media platform have a positive note on today’s young generation, but people like Michelle Obama
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her Podcast on YouTube and Spotify whose words are true inspiration.
Furthermore
,
celebrities
do good deeds which help many. Teens these days have a biased
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, in order to have
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positive vision
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life Some
celebrities
do donate their wealth to charities,
many
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and many
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celebrities
talk about their ways of achieving their dreams but they
also
support
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teenagers to dream big and achieve them.
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, they might not always have good
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; after
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they are humans too. BTS have millions of fans across the globe; BTS have made
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impact on fans. They inspired them
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dreams, love themselves and help others. BTS have donated million
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since the pandemic
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started.
To conclude
,
Celebrities
world revolve around glow and money but there are instances where
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work
inspired
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many young people
in pursuing
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their dreams. Judging them by their roles they do is wrong as they are humans too and they too make mistakes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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