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Some people think that creativity is somthing inborn, while others say it can be acquired. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #creativity
People
 have different views about
creativity
. Someone believes that
human
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 have to
born
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 with creative abilities when others think that to be imaginative,
people
 should train their brain and thinking. In my opinion,
creativity
 is something acquired, because imagination is quietly related
with
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 personalities dreaming about an idea. Nowadays, researchers prooved that
creativity
 is not just an inborn ability.
People
 have different ways of thinking and to develop
this
, they do special tasks like connecting unrelated pictures with a certain story or
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 about something unusual. Currently, there are so many techniques to improve
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the human’s
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human’s
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 mind and some of them
gives
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opportunity
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 to do it at home. Improving
creativity
 is difficult as well as training Olympic
gamer
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 to competitions. History shows that there were no achievements in any other field without devoting hundreds, thousands of time, which means to pay attention to work which was made to achieve any goals.
People
 are not talented. They just were
attrackted
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attracted
attacked
 or
encoureged
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encouraged
 by something on young ages which is
conveid
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conveyed
 in their ability. The same situation is happening with
creativity
.
For example
,
person
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the person
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 who is painting since he or she was a child is
better
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a better
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 painter than someone who
recently
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is recently
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 interested
on
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 drawing. All children
thinks
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 more creatively, but when they get older they are stopping to fantasy and developing their imaginative skills. In conclusion,
creativity
 is an acquired skill and every personality should work hard to develop it to be better in spheres
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 requires unusual thinking.
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