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the primary reasons that people came to and left the UK in 2007.

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The pie charts illustrate the primary reasons that
people
 came to and left the
UK
 in 2007. At
first
, glance it is clear that the main factor influencing
this
 decision was employment. Having a definite job accounted for 30 per cent of immigration to the
UK
, and
this
 figure was very similar for emigration, at 29%. A large number of
people
, 22%,
also
 emigrated because they were looking for a job, though the proportion of
people
 entering the
UK
 for
this
 purpose was noticeably lower at less than a fifth. Another major factor influencing a move to the
UK
 was for formal study, with over a quarter of
people
 immigrating for
this
 reason.
However
, interestingly, only a small minority, 4%, left for
this
. The proportions of those moving to join a family member were quite similar for immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13% respectively.
Although
 a significant number of
people
 (32%) gave ‘other’ reasons or did not give a reason why they emigrated,
this
 accounted for only 17% with regards to immigration.
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