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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology creates many amazing changes in our life, including driverless transportation, which suggests that one day all vehicles will be automated, with
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 merely passengers. In
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 is public safety. Until now, we can find many cars accidents anywhere, not only on the main road but
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 on some side roads.
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human error.
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 includes how people sometimes use their phones, are drunk, or not fully concentrating while driving. All these errors can be reduced with the system which automatically drives and is aware of the presence of each other's cars since the system would be well integrated. The
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 can have more time to do other work,
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, enjoy some hobbies, have meals, or even take a nap while the car drives by itself. Of course, there are some disadvantages.
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, there will be no room for drivers. Many people who drive to make their living are likely to become unemployed. And some people are
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 concerned about the failure or error that might occur on the systems,
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 as others can hack other vehicles or the error that can cause the accident.
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, in the future, many car manufacturers will probably produce more driverless cars. In my own opinion,
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 more benefits rather than drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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