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Some people believe prefer that to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

#people #house #apartment
The table illustrates the proportion of
students
 with various problems in learning
skills
 in two primary schools between 2005 and 2015. As an overview, the most significant noticeable is more
number
 of
students
 who studied in
school
 A have trouble in all areas of study than the
students
 from
school
 B over the 2 years given.
However
, the trends present the reduction of suffered
students
 from
school
 A in 2015. While the
number
 of
students
 in another
school
 slight increased in some problems and maintained at the same level in some parts. Regarding the most problem area in 2005 for
students
 from
school
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 A was following instructions at 42 before dramatically dropping to 18 in 2015. Following
by
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concentration in the class, 40
students
 were in
this
 case
then
 reduced to 18 in 2015 as well. In terms of verbal expression, listening
skills
, spelling, handwriting and reading ability were approximately 22-35 people for each case,
consequently
fell
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 to 21, 20, 25, 28 and 23 respectively.
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
students
 in
school
 B slight increased in 2015 in some problems which were reading ability, spelling, listening
skills
, verbal expression but not a huge concern as the
number
 were under 15
students
 per each case. Other
skills
remained
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that remained
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 stable which was handwriting and concentration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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