Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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think out adolescent
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more pleasant.while
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think that the
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adulthood
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happiest part of
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life
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, they do not need to worry about the responsibilities of the family.
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have no
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pocket money.in fact ,they
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free and all their expenditure have taken by their parents.
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teenager enjoy their school precious
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several events and they have some fun with friends.
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adult
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further
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their
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their parties
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enjoy
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it with their friends.
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, they have their dream jobs.
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regarding money-
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they have their beautiful family so they spent most of their
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relaxation
and happy.
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