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Social media is becoming increasingly popular among all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays social network has gained popularity in
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society and not only teenagers but
also
 middle age people
share
 their daily life with the risks that it has. I believe that the risks depend on which social media personal
information
 is shared. We all know that there are
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social networks in which the
users
share
 photos, thoughts and locations and in my opinion that could be dangerous.
For instance
, there are
users
 who
share
 their own location on holidays in streaming, and they are not aware that,
this
 simple fact could lead to criminal acts or robberies.
Although
 alarm systems are increasing recently, burglars are trained to disconnect them
Nevertheless
,
this
 is only an example of the high risks things that could happen in fact, there is another dangerous reason to avoid sharing personal lives, and it is when people
share
 their children's pictures. "Deep-web" has been recently discovered and it is a kind of forbidden internet in which
users
 can find the most horrible things related to the human being, and in
this
case
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 there is a black market with
chilndren
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children
 organ's trafficking. In my opinion, that
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is the main reason why people should not
share
 their personal lives and specifically children's lives.
However
, there are
also
 social networks in which the kind of
information
 uploaded could give society benefits, there is an example in which platforms like Linkedin could help
users
 to find a job, in
this
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 I believe that sharing
information
 had more advantages than disadvantages or
for instance
 business Instagram accounts. These Instagram accounts are useful to make a free advertisement for your business, and no matter how well-known it is, the Instagram algorithm would make it famous. In my opinion, there are a lot of dangerous social networks in which
customer's
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 personal
information
 is not safe but
otherwise
, others have restricted rules in relationship with data and personal
information
.
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