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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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In recent years developing technology, especially
computers
, has had some effects on
students
, and they have been dependent on
this
 device. And in
this
 essay, I will analyze the
problems
 and explore viable solutions.
This
 issue has caused some considerable
problems
.
To begin
 with, it has caused
students
 to become less creative and self-confident. Since they are high- addictive to
computers
, they lost their power of thinking and analyzing.
Thus
, in the long- term they will be less visionary and innovator.
For example
, in a school, the
students
 do their homework and research through the internet on
computers
, and they can not solve the
problems
 by themselves.
In addition
,
this
 reliance on the computer has caused children to feel solitude. Owing to being occupied with
this
 device, they have lost their connections and relationships.
Therefore
, they experience loneliness and depression. To exemplify, when pupils spend more than 6 hours on laptops, they have no time to be with their friends and family members. Looking at the
problems
, there are some feasible solutions for
this
 disturbing issue.
First
, families and teachers should encourage
students
 to solve their homework alone and without any help from high-tech devices.
For instance
, it is beneficial to solve their math questions without the help of any laptops to become more independent and improve their personalities.
Second
, it is a high-priority solution to set defined consulting meetings for children to talk and spend time with their relatives and friends. Because they can commute without any appliance or machine. To cite an example, schools and universities should provide special sessions for them to guide them to use fewer
computers
. In conclusion,
although
 separating
students
 from
this
 alluring technology is unfeasible, the authority and the people in charge in schools or universities can set some programs and questions to overcome
this
 issue, and the
students
 will have to do them without any high-tech devices.
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