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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why children are less educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#children #time #television #book #tool
Nowadays,
children
 dedicated
big
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a big
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 amount of
time
 to watching
TV
 programs, cartoons or movies
insted
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instead
 of studying their subjects. As a consequence,
children
 gained much less knowledge than
elder
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the elder
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 generation, who had grown without
television
. I agree with
this
 statement to some extent In
era
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an era
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 of modernisation and
invention
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,invention
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 almost every household consist
one
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of one
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 or more
television
.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
persom
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person
persons
 who are born in 2000nds can watch
TV
 from infancy to adulthood what can lead huge
drowbacks
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drawbacks
such
 as addiction from
TV
 programmes and
unwillingnes
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unwillingness
willingness
 to study.
Additionally
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 it can create
a
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apply
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problems related
with
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to
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 socialisation, which
also
influnce
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influence
influenced
 to
studying
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the studying
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 process. It is well-known fact that
TV
 is not able to alter books, which
considered
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is considered
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a tons
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a ton
tons
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 of knowledge, which should be gained by pupils during their studying process. Lack of
abilities
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ability
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 to study
good
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well
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 in school is wasting
time
 at home. It means that parents
also
 have responsibilities to
children
's habits.
However
, spending much
time
 in front of
television
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the television
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not
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is not
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 only about disadvantages and distractors to study. It is the fact that
,
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apply
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television
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the television
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 industry published scientific programmes, related
with
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to
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 main subjects in schools, that improve their outlook. In case parents keep an eye
after
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on
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 their own child they would choose appropriate
TV
 shows. To conclude, despite the huge problems caused in
children
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children's
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 school life by wasting
time
 in front of
television
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the television
a television
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, parents can change its
influnce
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influence
 to
children
 by choosing suitable shows, forcing a sense of
interesting
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interest
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.
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