Being a celebrity-such as film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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People have different opinions over whether being a famous person is beneficial or not. Some assert that becoming a star has many drawbacks.
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. I strongly believe that the advantages of popular
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overwhelm
the disadvantages. On the one hand, it is generally acknowledged that the popular suffer from a lack of privacy as the public become nosy about their famous
stars
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' life.
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are curious about movie
stars
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and prestigious
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athletes
life as they want to be like them.
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, in Korea, a singer who gets an excessive amount of attention moved to
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the countryside
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since she wanted to become
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an ordinary
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person, but a significant number of her fans visited her house very often.
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, she had to
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her home. As
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example clearly illustrates, folks
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that celebrities
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need their own private area.
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, the famous tend to easily earn money as they can use their popularity. Companies often contact movie
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and successful sports players to advertise their products.
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, a posting on
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a famous
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person's social media has
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worthy
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of more than 50
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million
dollors
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dollars
.
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, it is evident that people who have a good reputation can be rich. In conclusion, while I accept that celebrities can
somtimes
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sometimes
be rather stressful due to scarcity of privacy, there is no doubt to point out that they can easily gain money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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