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In some countries, some criminal trials in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch them. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Since the
widely
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 use of television in most countries, the authorities tend to broadcast the scenes or videos of criminal
trial
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trials
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 through the public media to prevent
crime
.
Although
 it has some benefits, the disadvantages should not be ignored. Live criminal
trails
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trials
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 can be seen as a great way to deter
crime
.The most obvious is that if
people
 watched the
trail
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 videos, they might have a strong impression about the harsh punishment for criminal activities and try to perform as a model citizen.
Furthermore
, it allows the public to improve the awareness of
law
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 and acquire the knowledge of procedures of
trails
.
Besides
, it
also
 offers
people
 a way to gain information about protecting themselves and how to address the issues while they suffer from a
crime
.
However
, when the
footages
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 are shown on TV, there are
also
 some drawbacks.
Firstly
, live
trails
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 may not be suitable for some
people
, especially for teenagers, who might be easily influenced by the
midea
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media
 and copy what they see on Television.
In addition
, the
trails
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 shown on television may cause secondary harm for
people
 or their
family
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families
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 who suffered from a
crime
, because in most situations, they try to avoid being mentioned by others.
The most
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 important,showing
footages
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 of
criminal
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trail
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trial
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 is not the best option to address the root cause of
crime
 and reform criminals.Government should concentrate on the problems like poverty, discrimination, inequality and etc. In conclusion, I agree with the view that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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