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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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There is no doubt that
people
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 are responsible for the environmental
problems
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, but we need many steps to be taken to tackle these
problems
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. In
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 am going to introduce these
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 and what are the ways
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used by
government
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the government
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 and individual
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 to solve
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. Damaging the environment has various kinds in different areas. these
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 cause a lot of obstacles in our
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, building more and more accommodations for retirement and unuseful needs.
This
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, our economic
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also
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 decreased.
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, there are other
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 in the health
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, traffic
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 and sociable
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 which
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 has gradually
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.
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, we should take a lot of steps to tackle these environmental damages. The state and
people
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 are responsible for applying these solutions to our
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, for the
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government
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can apply specific rules to solve the environmental
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, paying money if any person breaks these rules over all various systems.
On the other hand
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, everyone should preserve his area from any
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 which will influence
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our
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.
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,
people
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 can make significant advertisements to raise the knowledge for
people
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 to care of our
Society
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. These advertisements can make through TV programs or using social media like Facebook and Twitter, etc.
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 , we take a large area of
people
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 to solve the environmental
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. In conclusion, as I mentioned above the
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 of our environment are because of us. While we are responsible for these damages, we must contribute to solving them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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