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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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There is no doubt that
people
 are responsible for the environmental
problems
, but we need many steps to be taken to tackle these
problems
. In
this
 essay,
i
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 am going to introduce these
problems
 and what are the ways
that
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used by
government
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 and individual
people
 to solve
it
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. Damaging the environment has various kinds in different areas. these
problems
 cause a lot of obstacles in our
society
.
For example
, building more and more accommodations for retirement and unuseful needs.
This
 problem reduces the agricultural areas.
Consequently
, our economic
system
also
 decreased.
In addition
, there are other
problems
 in the health
system
, traffic
system
 and sociable
system
 which
also
 has gradually
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.
Therefore
, we should take a lot of steps to tackle these environmental damages. The state and
people
 are responsible for applying these solutions to our
Society
.
Firstly
, for the
,
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government
it
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can apply specific rules to solve the environmental
problems
.
For instance
, paying money if any person breaks these rules over all various systems.
On the other hand
, everyone should preserve his area from any
problems
 which will influence
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our
Society
.
Furthermore
,
people
 can make significant advertisements to raise the knowledge for
people
 to care of our
Society
. These advertisements can make through TV programs or using social media like Facebook and Twitter, etc.
Consequently
 , we take a large area of
people
 to solve the environmental
problems
. In conclusion, as I mentioned above the
problems
 of our environment are because of us. While we are responsible for these damages, we must contribute to solving them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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