Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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education method, which is parents support their
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engaging in extra group activities in their leisure time. Some people believe that
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it is essential for the new generations to learn how to be an independent
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to learn team working and social
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as a group.
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should start to learn how to
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with
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with other people while
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still young.
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, the baseball game is a great activity for
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, and from the game they can learn how to work as a team and through
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communication with other team members, the social skill will be built it.
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it is a significant process for
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how to be an independent
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to complete their
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without assistance from
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others. Because
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their parent wants their
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tough person and they will have
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ability to face any
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occur in their future.
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, there are a lot of pressures in society, especially after they graduated from school. The independent and tough personality may
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to survive under the pressure environment. In conclusion, I stronger believe that, the better education method by according the
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's personality development to combine of both points of view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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