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the contribution of various economic sectors to Xcontry GDP in three different year, starting from 2016.

The given table illustrates the contribution of various economic sectors to Xcontry
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 in three different years, starting from 2016. Overall, it is clear that the contribution numbers in the service sector experienced a downward trend, while that of all other sectors indicated an upward trend. According to the table, there was an increase in the number of agriculture and industry sectors
GDP
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 throughout the period, the industry sector’s
GDP
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 rose moderately from 22% in 2016 to 30% in 2018.
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, the
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 of agriculture dropped slightly from 13% in 2016to only 11% in 2017 and
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 increased steadily, reaching 15% a year later.
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, there was a significant movement in the service sector’s
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. Its
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 fell minimally from 65% in 2016 to 64% in 2017;
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 represented dramatically decline to only 55% after passing one year.
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 was still the highest rate of all three sectors’
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.

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